The Tapestry

When I look at the tapestry there are several well known icons of Sydney in it . The tapestry reminds me of a postcard of Sydney. It has the Harbour Bridge in the background of the picture and the Opera House positioned on the left. It has Luna Park under the bridge. There are flames of fire around Luna Park acknowledging the accident that happened on the 9th June 1979 that sadly killed 6 children and 1 adult.


The tapestry attracts your vision with its use of bright colours. It invites you to look harder at the little details in the picture like the landing of the first ship “The Endevour” which landed at Botany Bay in 1770. It subsequently went on to navigate around Australia later on that year. The main feature is the Southern Cross depicted as fireworks over Sydney Harbour on New Year’s Eve. There are also pictures on the tapestry acknowledging the first Australian with picture of Uluru, a dingo, a hand print, birds and fish.

Martin Sharp designed this artwork on the poem “Australia” by Bernard O’Dowd which is on the frame around the tapestry. The tapestry was donated to the NSW State Library in 1988 where it hangs on the wall, it is 3 metres wide and 6 metres long.

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6 thoughts on “The Tapestry

  1. https://broomy69.home.blog/

    For my final Peer Review, I decided to do Heather Broomham’s blog of ‘The Tapestry.” 

    I can say nothing other than how great it was to read. It was short and sweet and expresses your Australian pride, as well as the acknowledgment of our Aboriginal ancestors.

    I especially liked how you pointed out the small features of the dingo and the fish, which was something I can say I might not have noticed without your observations.

    Thank you for making it a great last blog for me to look at.

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  2. Hi Broomy69, yes you are definitely getting better at expressing yourself. You have successfully described what you see when you look at the Martin Sharp painting. Try, however, not to write sentences that are too lengthy. Long sentences can easily lead to confusion in expressing yourselfaccurately. I know this from personal experience. 🙂
    So:
    The tapestry attracts your vision with it’s use of bright colours and it invites you to look harder at the little details in the picture like the landing of the first ship “The Endevour” which landed at Botany Bay in 1770 where it when on to navigate around Australia later on that year.
    You can make 3 sentences with this : the tapestry attracts your vision with its (not it’s) use of bright colours. It invites you to look harder at the little details in the picture such as ( better than like) the landing of the first ship “The Endeavour” which landed at Botany Bay in 1770. It subsequently went (not when) on to navigate around Australia later that year.
    You can just say first Australians without needing to put Aboriginal in brackets. Also you dont need an apostrophe in Aboriginals.
    This seems like a lot of editing I know but you have done a fine job of writing this blog. Well done!

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  3. Heather this is a lovely piece and your writing is definitely improving very much! So keep going! All will be well. But please study carefully the few corrections I have made below….
    MG
    Editing Needed (and some workshop follow-ups- see Purdue Owl for help: http://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/section/1/
    * It has Luna Park under the bridge, there are flames of fire around Luna Park…. =It has Luna Park under the bridge. There are flames of fire around Luna Park… [ new sentence needed. See http://www.englishforeveryone.org/Topics/Run-On-Sentences.htm ]
    *New Years Eve= New Year’s Eve – [apostrophe s is needed because the Eve BELONGS to the New Year. Remember: ‘s or s’ – Apostrophe- if there is a meaning of ownership ( the boy’s apple/ the boys’ apples) then you need an apostrophe. See http://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/621/01/. But don’t use apostrophe s for normal plurals!!!]
    *acknowledging the first Australian’s with picture’s of Uluru= – now here “Australians” and “pictures” are straight-forward plurals and they DON’T need ‘s here. Why not? Because you are not talking about “the Australian’s beer can” or “the picture’s frame”. You are not talking about anything that BELONGS to either the Australians or to the pictures….. can you see the difference? Check again: ‘s or s’ – Apostrophe- if there is a meaning of ownership ( the boy’s apple/ the boys’ apples) then you need an apostrophe. See http://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/621/01/. But don’t use apostrophe s for normal plurals!!!
    *bird’s and fish. = birds and fish. – [you mean simply MORE THAN ONE BIRD. You are not talking about “the bird’s wing” for example in which case the wing BELONGS to the bird and therefore needs an ‘s. But you are not doing that here. You are simply referring to more than one (plural) bird- does that make sense???? ]
    *The tapestry was donated to the NSW State Library in 1988 where it’s hangs on the wall, it is 3 metres wide and 6 metres long.= The tapestry was donated to the NSW State Library in 1988 where it hangs on the wall. It is 3 metres wide and 6 metres long.- [ I have made two very important corrections here Heather. Can you spot them? Can you say why I made them?]

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